Can you review of my poem "Kid, stand on your own and become a full human!" and its page stats?

bijja

I liked the poem. It was good. Descriptive, gentle, loving,

parental, you brought the reader in with a kind spirit and

I left feeling glad I read it.

I did have a difficult time navigating the web site and making

sure I had 'your' poem. The stats are amazing. IMHO, I

would post the poem here. I realize it does not take a lot of

time, but it did take me a few minutes before I fully laid my

eyes on your poem. See below------ I am not one of those

people that does not read the poem, but I can tell you--bijja,

you will lose folks by not posting the poem here on YAP.

As we know, very few people appreciate and read poetry.

(read this on link bijja gave us)

Regarding the construct, the poem flowed decent though the

meter vacillated making it a little disjointed, but am a little picky

here--still, you did good. One last thing---I would make the last

word more human. Make it personal to us, like 'man' 'young man'

'woman' 'adolescent.'

Congrats

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You may want to put a link to the poem itself, as I am having trouble with that. The stats are incredible.