So how is this poem ?

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i walk into a room with black roses on the side
theres a mirror at the end and i start to walk
i walk and feel like crying hear voices screaming why i'm doing such a thing, 
i keep on walking i cant get to the mirror and somehow i feel passsionate about what im going 2 see,
someone pulls my legs, 
i feel scratches on my knee for someone is not letting me move on, 
they are smoking, they are showing me beautiful girls and wine bottles,
the window opens and the wind shouts how i should not see whats oon that mirror, 
i look at the floor and see footsteps full of blood, 
im being chocked and my hair is being pulled, 
screaming out of my head i cant take the pain, 
why wont they let me see the mirror, 
i suffer but i wont stop, 
i m dying to know what happens , 
i hear painfull sounds and im finally on front of the mirror, 
my fears goes away, 
my pain stops and i hear nothing but silence , 
i look in the mirror, theres an innocent kid looking at me who doesnt want 2 see his true self, i wake up and i breath
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Anonymous · Accepted Answer

I couldn't care less about your poem, "why are you answering this kind of question" i hear people say...i didn't come here by choice and had some jerk send me an email with his link to desperation. 
if i was at all interested im answering questions about poetry, i would probably come across this, Alas, i don't give a flying **** about it, im not a fan and i don't know anything, so my answer is useless to you! 

Give people a break, if they want to answer your question they will, don't go around PMing people you don't know in a desperate attempt to get more answers. Its just rude and annoying.

As for the poem, like i said, i don't know aboutt poetry, this sounded like a long boring drawn out description of depressing stuff.....cheer up!!!

Mind · Answer

To be brutally honest, I was not very impressed on your poem. It has some depth to it,  but the depth was too masked by exaggeration of trying to create sadistic beauty, which is not presented well within the context of the poem. 

I think you will only get better with time if this is what is your forte~, when you have a lot more experience with the real world.

? · Answer

Excellent expression, better feelings, nothing bad to highlight. Sure you deserve for a star, here goes with what you need. More poems are expected with pleasure. Good luck and be a best writer.

Anonymous · Answer

hi friend

i don't really see it as a poem, sort of part of a longer story for me about someones search for themselves

as they were and as they are

like the content and emotion, it is good

Poppy · Answer

Aw, I like it. It's nicely written and has a beautiful meaning to it. Well done :)

Anonymous · Answer

Usually, people who have SEVERELY wronged others have issues with looking into a mirror....I enjoy who I see in the mirror everyday.  If you don't , you may want to fix it.

Anonymous · Answer

Nice, but a poem should be written in a particular way know..? Mmm, nice try..:-)

Phellipe Burns · Answer

omg its is a awesome poem mate u know what u should be a poet best poem i every read.

? · Answer

Pretty good, but it's sorta disturbing. Lol

Anonymous · Answer

Nice poem, yes, I gave you a star*  :-)))

? · Answer

excellent write! sorry i have no suggestions to make. But i liked it when i read it.

So how is this poem ?

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